Execution of your fictional story (part 2 of writing a fictional story)

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Execution of your fictional story (part 2 of writing a fictional story)


In part one of this series I addressed the issue of creating your fictional story and how to do prewriting and brainstorming, a part of writing which I find to be both the hardest and the most dull. However if you have reached this point then you are on to the fun part of your story. In this we will be covering how to effectively execute your ideas onto paper (or an online document) using correct grammar.

Sample Problem

So you have your idea, plot, conflict, and characters made out but now you have to find a clear and concise way to write it while still following the guidelines set out by your instructor but you aren’t able to find a way to translate the image in your head to paper. This can be a common problem found among writers but it can be avoided.


Now before you continue to this step know I will be referencing multiple pre writing tips I addressed in part 1 of this essay however know that reading part one; while recommended is not required.

I often have troubles starting a story rather than keeping it going and this seems to be the main deterrent for writing, the difficulty of creating an enticing introduction to your fictional story. The key aspect of this is too not overthink it. This is your story, your idea, and your creative outlet. Each paper you write will have a piece of your personality in it and the best papers, I’ve found and my instructors all agree, have a clear and concise writing style specific to you. So just begin writing what you think sounds good in reference to your prewriting list of events.

Another thing that deters most writers is the fear it won’t sound perfect however this is common and more than likely true at first. No paper will ever sound perfect during your rough draft and expecting it to, while convenient will lead to self doubt and writer’s block so let your ideas flow and know that you will be able to come back during revision and make all of it sound better and exactly how you like.

Revision is the big part of really making a story click with your audience. You have created the story for you but now it is time to make it engaging to read. This can often be done through strong use of writing techniques found throughout your teachings such as using good word choice, synonyms, and proper punctuation. These things are the cornerstone of your paper and provided the much needed groundwork for making your paper flow nicely. Here are a few ways to check to see if your paper flows well

  • Read out loud to yourself
  • Have someone else read it and judge grammar and punctuation
  • Look for places where you can substitute periods for commas and semicolons. Your teachers will appreciate the use of punctuation and it will reflect well on you
  • Search up synonyms for words you’ve used often and be sure you understand how to use them in the correct context

This will allow your paper, during first edits, to flow well and look professional which are important aspects of creating a story. The next thing you can do to make your paper more interesting is use a popular writing elements such as foreshadowing. Foreshadowing is a great technique to hint at what’s to come and it can be blatant or sly, as long as it’s done correctly it will provide tension to the conflict of your story

Now say you wanted to foreshadow a trap being set up by your villain. You could make this subtle or obvious to your readers but the key is keeping it a suprise to the other characters. If you were to foreshadow a trap and wanted it to be obvious to your readers, you could use an 3rd person onimpitent writing style and show things happening to the villain. Through this you will learn what the villain is planning but it will be kept secret from the heros allowing the creation of tension. Another way you could write in foreshadowing is through subtle points made in the story. I find the use of both dialouge and descriptive writing can lead to a great set up in the reveal as the reveal is what allows the tension to be released and therefore keep your audience entertained.

Foreshadowing should very clearly have a setup and punchline much like a joke does. Below I have included an excerpt taken from a fantasy story I wrote for a college class, see if you can try and find the foreshadowing and once you do look again for the setup and the punchline. There are two different instances of it in this excerpt that are later explained below.

Example of foreshadowing taken from excerpt my Beowulf story

Amergian rushed to pyromancers aid, ignoring the orders of his commander.
“Hurry Rehegar, I sense he is dying,” Amerigan said as he looked for a way to save the pyromancer from his chains, “Where is the key?”
“He has the key,” said the pyromancer. The old wizard growing weary, “You can’t free me, you must run.”
Rehegar heard the man’s warning and was already busy at working trying to pry the sewer gate back open but it was to no avail, it was locked indefinitely. As panic soon overtook the men they grabbed wildly for answers searching for a way out of their new tomb.
“Do you know the way out sorcerer?” Amergian asked the pyromancer
The pyromancer in chains looked puzzled before nodding his head, “There is a way but I can not show you, you must get the key or we shall all die here.”
Anxiety and fear had overcome the men, the prospect of certain death as foretold by en enemy was not uncommon but an enemy who had been double crossed. There was nothing more dangerous than a man willing to turn on his own people and Beowulf’s army knew this well.
“Amerigan,” pleaded Rehegar, “Amerigan we must go, he is no use to us and he will not be able to help us. Staying is pointless.”
“How do you propose we get out without the help of someone who’s been here,” spat back Amerigan, “He obviously knows this place.”
“He knows it because he is our enemy!” Rehegar returned quickly as his anger rose, “I am your leader, you will listen to me.”
“No!” Amerigan yelled pulling his sword, “Beowulf is my leader and now we face death because of him. This man could be our only hope.”
Rehegar looked at his former friend and allies blade as the small amount of candle light caused a gleam in the blade, “Amerigan, don’t do this.”
But Rehegar had spoken too soon and within an instant the chains on the old mans wrists and freed him. Amerigan’s relief however soon faded when the pyromancer froze in terror. Everything stood still for one solid second before the cranks could be heard. The now broken chains rattled on the ground being pulled back into the wall quickly by some mysterious mechanism. The men looked around terrified as they tried to figure out what they had just done.
“You fools,” spoke the pyromancer in a quiet voice, “You’ve doomed us all.”
And with those final words the candle light turned to smoke and the walls moved in, pushing shelf after shelf of unlit wildfire onto the ground; the glass vases shattering across the floor and spreading the hell spawn inside across the room. The green liquid oozing over every surface in the small cell. The soldiers rushed to the bars of the cell trying to pry it open to no avail. Panic had spread like a disease and the disfunction was now the symptoms, brother turning on brother fighting to get to the steel cell gates in some attempt at feeling free one last time before what seemed to be their coming death. The final sound they heard was the cranking of a gear and the sharp sound of ignition as the wildfire ignited and within a flash, the men were no more.

Now did you catch the foreshadowing? It is first set using dialogue in a quick repertoire of back and forth between two characters, “Amerigan” and “Rehegar” over what to do. Through their arguing you catch multiple points of foreshadowing to their eventual demise such as the fate of the old man. This old man ends up being the reason for their death and he warns them rightly so be it cryptically. Rehegar sense this and understands, trying to escape without him however Amerigan’s sense of morality tells him to help. Them arguing over this foreshadows the eventual turn on each other that happens later on in that passage leading to their demise. Another example that is more subtle would be the aspect of fire mentioned a few times during the passage. While at first glance this is just read off as a way to describe the situation in which our characters have found themselves, on a second, closer reading you might be able to spot the foreshadowing. Candle light is the set up to this as it is first noted in relation to lighting up the cage they are trapped in. Candles are often thought of as safe but turning them around and putting it in a cell makes it seem ominus which provides the tone for the foreshadowing and eventual fate of our heros. The set up then references the punchline when the soldiers demise is also by fire, but only when the candle that provided the only light goes out, leaving our heros in dark.

Using these techniques you can create a gripping story and get it down on paper. It isn’t always easy but know overthinking is often the death of your paper and that this is first and foremost; your story. Tell it how you please and be sure to make it entertaining to you. You are your own best critic and therefore you should write it in mind that you want to create a story you would read. For anymore information or help adding more writing techniques to your story you can hire me. I am always willing to help with patience and a smile. Thank you, have a good day

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